Three Cheers for the Weather – “Raw! Raw! Raw!”

I thought it was pretty at first, the way the fog rolled in over the bay and completely hid the water from view.

Foolish girl!

It rolled onto the lower beach areas and the land close to the water.

Smugly, I thought, “How pretty it looks, and how lucky am I to be living on higher ground in the clear blue sky.”

But pride comes before the fall. You might be able to see the mist lifting ever so slightly, rising up, looking for me.

Here it comes…

and here it stays, full of tiny droplets of ice water that almost freeze the air.

Carl Sandburg’s Chicago poem, “Fog,” made an impression on me the first time I heard it. He says it so simply, so “on the mark,” and with beautiful imagery.

The fog comes
on little cat feet.

It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and then moves on.

Carl Sandburg

But …

I’m sorry, Carl. I find that very often, the last line of your poem doesn’t work for me, so I’ve had to change it.

 

The fog comes
on little cat feet.

It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and stays and stays and stays and stays and stays… .

Anneli Purchase

30 thoughts on “Three Cheers for the Weather – “Raw! Raw! Raw!”

  1. montucky

    We are getting a lot of that too, to the south of here though where it has caused temperature inversions. Luckily we have stayed above it where the temps stayed warmer than the single digits a hundred miles to the south. That cat sure gets around!

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  2. roughwighting

    You are so funny! Raw Raw Raw indeed. I happen to love the fog – when we lived in the SF Bay area I’d listen to the deep fog horns (from near the Golden Gate Bridge) from our cozy warm home. But, I admit, where we lived the fog cleared out almost every day by noon. ;-0

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    1. wordsfromanneli Post author

      Third day of waiting for it to lift. Well, okay, it lifted a little bit but I still can barely make out the far shoreline, not to mention the hills that we can usually see. The wind is supposed to come up very briskly tomorrow evening, so it will be back to good ole wind and rain. I almost welcome it.

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  3. Debra

    I’ve always loved the Sandburg poem and thought it perfect! But then, I must admit I’ve never had an unrelenting winter weather experience. I think you’re on to something with your clever revision. Brrr!

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    1. wordsfromanneli Post author

      Thanks, Thom. We are now past the fog stage (for a while anyway) and have bright blue skies that are totally foreign to us here on the coast in the winter. The snow on the mountaintops is pink in the mornings. What a change!

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